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1. 说明你是该报的忠实读者
2. 赞赏该报优点:
1) 兼顾国内外新闻
2) 介绍名人成功故事
3. 提出建议:刊登指导英语学习的文章
注意:
1. 词数100左右,开头语已为你写好;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Dear Editor-in-Chief,
Congratulations on the 5th anniversary of Global Mirror!
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Sincerely yours,
Li Hua
范文【解析】
本文为书信形式的应用文写作。信的开头和结尾都已经给出。题目中对文章结构和部分内容做出了提示,降低了写作难度,考生可在此基础上适当添加细节。根据题目,文章的内容分为3部分,一是“介绍自己为该报的忠实读者”,二是该报的优点,三是给报刊提出建议。其中第二、三点为重点。考生添加的报刊优点和建议应当合情合理,同时原因、建议不只一个,因此一定要注意写作的逻辑性,适当运用过渡性词语,如besides,what’s more, finally等。为了提高文章的表达档次,可以注意使用较复杂的句式(如定语从句、原因状语从句、目的状语从句)。
【范文1】Dear Editor-in-Chief,
Congratulations on the 5th anniversary of Global Mirror!
I’m a regular reader of your Weekly and it is due to its two advantages that I show strong love for the newspaper. ②On one hand, it is a newspaper where readers can get the latest civil and foreign news in time. ③On the other hand②, there are many stories about how famous people succeeded, from which we can benefit a lot.④
However, I still have a suggestion to make. If only the Weekly contained some articles guiding us through learning English⑤, it will be more than a newspaper for a middle school student. ⑥
Sincerely yours,
Li Hua
【范文评析】
本篇习作语言地道,覆盖了所有要点,虽只有94个词,但在此中,众多的高级句式结构却被作者运用得恰到好处,如定语从句、强调结构、宾语从句、虚拟语气等。难能可贵的是,作者对写作要点拿捏得很准,最后在提建议时,适当发挥,使得建议的意义更大。
【词句积累】
①使用强调结构,使得句型富有变化。
②用on one hand,on the other hand来代替庸俗的first(ly),second(ly),非常好!另外,还能增加字数。
③在该句中使用where定语从句,显示该考生的语法很强。
④介词后的宾语从句,非限制性定语从句的应用,令阅卷老师折服了。作者的巨型布局艺术,其语法的娴熟,并能得心应手地收发自如,让阅卷老 师赞赏。
⑤此处使用if only,谓语要用虚拟语气,妙!妙!另外,guide sb. through doing sth. 体现该考生较强的词汇运用能力。
⑥more than是一个亮点表达。该句使短文的意义得到升华。
【范文2】
Dear Editor-in-Chief,
Congratulations on the 5th anniversary of Global Mirror!
I have been a faithful reader since Global Mirror started. ①
It is the unique advantages of the newspaper that always attract my affection. ②For one thing③, the newspaper covers news both at home and abroad, which opens a window for us to learn what is happening in the world. ④For another③, stories about some famous people are introduced to readers, which tell of how they succeeded in what they did.
The newspaper is indeed my best friend, but I think you’d better have some articles that can guide us to learn English. ⑤If so, it will have a larger audience of readers.
Sincerely yours,
Li Hua
【范文评析】
本篇习作一气呵成,滴水不漏。运用了一些高级句式结构如强调句型,非限制性定语从句等。时态把握准确到位,如since引导的现在完成时,to learn后的现在进行时等,使文章增色不少。总的来说是一篇好文章。
【词句积累】
①一开始就用since,时态正确,先声夺人。
②使用强调句型,征服阅卷老师。
③用for one thing和for another代替平庸first和second,显示作者的词汇能力。
④非限制性定语从句的使用,to learn后的现在进行时态,无不让人叹服。
⑤巧妙地使用but,委婉,又达到提建议的目的。
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